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I am not sure if this is the right spot, but can someone please review my book I am writing? Thanks and Enjoy!
Nano yawned and woke up to the sound of a worried voice. "Please wake up," a small pokemon exclaimed. Nano eyed the pokemon with her frosty blue eyes, but she couldn't see. Her vision was blurred, and the creature looked like a ball of tan fur.
"Hmm? " She muttered.
"Great! Your awake! " The pokemon said.
Nano looked at him in disbelief. "What?! Did you just talk to me?" She asked.
"Are you feeling ok? Of course I just talked to you. " He said, "My name is Koda, nice to meet you, uhh.. " The small Eevee said.
"Nano," She said.
"Ok! Nice to meet you, Nano! " Koda said smiling.
Nano trotted over to a puddle of cold water and lapped some up. She looked at her reflection in the water and stumbled back. "WHAA?!" She exclaimed. "I-I'm a Poochyena!"
She turned around and looked at her fluffy tail.
Koda laughed as he watched Nano chase her tail.
Nano and Koda froze when a shrill scream was heard. A Delicatty dashed over to the two and looking like close to tears.
"Pl-Please help me! My poor baby was trapped when a fissure opened up! She is stuck, but I can't help. Pokemon are attacking!" She explained. Koda nodded and turned to Nano. "Nano, We have to help her! Please come with me!"
Nano nodded and replied. "Sure! I'll help!"
Koda and Nano ran off towards the cave. The entered and a Wurmple attacked them. Nano swiped at it, fainting it. They continued on until thew reached a crack leading down. They carefully stepped down and saw a Skitty huddling in a corned. Koda stepped forward and spoke softly to the young pokemon. " Come on, we'll help you out of here."" The Skitty nodded and stood up. She followed Nano and Koda hung back, watching for any pokemon. They climbed out of the cave, and Skitty ran over to her mom.
"Thank You! Thank you very much for helping me!"
Nano and Koda smiled and nodded. "Your welcome!" Nano replied. The Delicatty and Skitty ran off, leaving Nano and Koda alone.
That was Chapter 1. I am aiming for about 6-7 chapters. Hope you liked it so far!
Nano yawned and woke up to the sound of a worried voice. "Please wake up," a small pokemon exclaimed. Nano eyed the pokemon with her frosty blue eyes, but she couldn't see. Her vision was blurred, and the creature looked like a ball of tan fur.
"Hmm? " She muttered.
"Great! Your awake! " The pokemon said.
Nano looked at him in disbelief. "What?! Did you just talk to me?" She asked.
"Are you feeling ok? Of course I just talked to you. " He said, "My name is Koda, nice to meet you, uhh.. " The small Eevee said.
"Nano," She said.
"Ok! Nice to meet you, Nano! " Koda said smiling.
Nano trotted over to a puddle of cold water and lapped some up. She looked at her reflection in the water and stumbled back. "WHAA?!" She exclaimed. "I-I'm a Poochyena!"
She turned around and looked at her fluffy tail.
Koda laughed as he watched Nano chase her tail.
Nano and Koda froze when a shrill scream was heard. A Delicatty dashed over to the two and looking like close to tears.
"Pl-Please help me! My poor baby was trapped when a fissure opened up! She is stuck, but I can't help. Pokemon are attacking!" She explained. Koda nodded and turned to Nano. "Nano, We have to help her! Please come with me!"
Nano nodded and replied. "Sure! I'll help!"
Koda and Nano ran off towards the cave. The entered and a Wurmple attacked them. Nano swiped at it, fainting it. They continued on until thew reached a crack leading down. They carefully stepped down and saw a Skitty huddling in a corned. Koda stepped forward and spoke softly to the young pokemon. " Come on, we'll help you out of here."" The Skitty nodded and stood up. She followed Nano and Koda hung back, watching for any pokemon. They climbed out of the cave, and Skitty ran over to her mom.
"Thank You! Thank you very much for helping me!"
Nano and Koda smiled and nodded. "Your welcome!" Nano replied. The Delicatty and Skitty ran off, leaving Nano and Koda alone.
That was Chapter 1. I am aiming for about 6-7 chapters. Hope you liked it so far!