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Kickthekan123

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Posted 05 August 2009 - 04:31 PM ( #1 )

We're in the dark
Everything's black
Baby, it's time
There's no turning back
Not time for "We can't do this"
We have to, I believe we can
Do you have faith in us?
Just have to
Take.
My.
Hand.

Just take my hand
A step away from yesterday's lies
Just take my hand
I think that you'd be surprised
At how bright things can be
The different things you might see
A different person you can be
Just need to
Take.
My.
Hand.

It's not perfect, I know
Still working to put on a show
Whatever it takes to get rid of that frown
What happened to those beautiful blue eyes?
Those rosy cheeks of mine
The red lips, so divine
We can get those back
Just take my hand

Just take my hand
A step away from yesterday's lies
Just take my hand
I think that you'd be surprised
At how bright things can be
The different things you might see
A different person you can be
Just need to
Take.
My.
Hand.

At how bright things can be
The different things you might see
A different person you can be
Just need take my hand

:3 I'm new to writing songs so I'm terrible. Please judge (but not too harshly!) and comments are welcome. ^o^ Thanks!

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Posted 05 August 2009 - 05:09 PM ( #2 )

OO:

That's really, really good.
Mhhmm, I'mma go round singing this now and I don't even now the tune! :D

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Posted 06 August 2009 - 08:14 AM ( #3 )

heyaa it's great, but I dont get what they are meant to be doing?

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Posted 06 August 2009 - 09:02 AM ( #4 )

^ It's a song about (I'm assuming) people who've had a rough patch in their relationship, and one of them wants to get through it together.

At least, that's what I thought it was about. xD

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Posted 06 August 2009 - 03:57 PM ( #5 )

Correct! :-) LOVE. you are right! I love it! Should I write more?

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Posted 06 August 2009 - 04:06 PM ( #6 )

Yeah, I was going to say - if there was anything you needed to improve, it was to make it a bit longer. ;)

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Posted 06 August 2009 - 04:42 PM ( #7 )

Yay, thanks! :-D

Isn't it time
That I told your girlfriend
That you are mine
Isn't it time
That I told you
That there's something on my mind
Isn't it time
That I admitted
What I feel for you

Yeah it is
Yeah it's time
Yeah it's time

How it feels when we're apart
I can't explain it but it
Hurts
Are we just friends
Or are we more?
How it feels when
I know you know that I love you too
But you don't feel the same way back
You're the train
My heart's the train tracks


Ya don't needa know
How much pain.
When my heart's hit by that train

I still love you but it
Hurts
I can't say it but I'm proven wrong everyday
I say "You and her aren't lovers"
But then you kiss
You tell me 'bye
Then I let out a small sigh
You tell her you love her
She loves ya back
Oh yeah
You're the train
My heart's the train tracks

X3 It stinks. I know. I lost tune and everything and it's soooo short. Whadya think!

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Posted 07 August 2009 - 11:02 AM ( #8 )

^ Is it the continuation of Take My Hand? S;

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Posted 12 August 2009 - 06:58 AM ( #9 )

It's beautiful! i love it!
:*) << tears in eyes