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A Night in the Rain


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Posted 15 August 2009 - 12:02 PM ( #1 )

"Moonlight reflected off of his eyes as he turned around to face her.

"I'm sorry. Farewell." He opened his black umbrella and walked away from her, his footsteps reverberating endlessly through the rain-drenched pavement.
She gritted her teeth and ran after him, swiftly knocking the umbrella from his hand. A roar of thunder erupted in the sky as she put her hands on his shoulders and shoved him down to the damp grass. He looked up at her, stunned.
'Wh-why?!" She choked. "Why are you leaving?" She clenched her fists and beat on his chest. Tears fell onto his cold neck.
"Becasuse," he looked into her eyes. "I thought you hated me...and wanted me to leave," he breathed, his voice cracking. Rain pelted his face and drenched his hair.
"H-hate you?" She managed to gasp. "Hate you?" She released her hands from their clenched state.
"Hate you? I don't hate you...I-I love you." She said in a defeated whisper.
"But I know that you-" her voice caught. "I know that you don't love me, so-" She let out a loud sob.
"I'm sorry..." Tears soaked her face.

The sound of the pouring rain filled their silence.

After a moment, he got up and sat against the trunk of a sakura tree. He chuckled and suddenly wrapped his arms around her. He hugged her tightly against him.
"You dummy," he whispered, his lips grazing her ear. "Why would you even think something as absurd as that? If I didn't love you, then how come you're the one that's always on my mind? How come you're the one I can't look at once without catching my breath? How come you're the one...that I want to be forever with?"
He looked deep into her soul. "Of course I..."

She didn't need to hear any more.

She gently closed her eyes and rested her head against his chest, feeling the steady rhythm of his heart.

Rain and sakura leaves fell around them, as they embraced until dawn."

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Posted 17 August 2009 - 09:48 AM ( #2 )

Wow... that's brilliant. You really captured the emotions of the characters, without making it sound unrealistic. That's hard to do.

Is this the start of a book you are writing? It sounds very promising if it is <_< Also, will there be more?

Well done :wacko:

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