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Posted 05 October 2009 - 06:34 PM ( #1 )

At this moment, I'm just really upset about a lot of things. Mainly myself and who I am. And it just hit me: write about it.

Self Disrespect

Every morning
I look in the mirror
And I see who I am--
Well, how the world sees me
And every morning, I want it to go away

There is no cure for how we were created
Flesh, blood, bone
There is no cure for how it's been put together

But every day
I wish, more and more
That I could change how the world sees me
My hair, my face

It eats away at me, as I sit
In class, in public
And as I see "perfection" walk by
I hear the voices, laughing at me.
Although they may be imaginary

It makes me cry sometimes
To see myself in a mirror
And to know that I can't be
Who I want to be






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Posted 05 October 2009 - 07:10 PM ( #2 )

Nicely done, Twin. But it makes me sad that that's how you feel. )':

Everyone is beautiful in every way. Inside and out. Our bones are the frame and we're the masterpiece. That's what I say. ;3

Edited by `Krystal, 05 October 2009 - 07:11 PM.


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Posted 05 October 2009 - 07:46 PM ( #3 )

It's pretty good, however, this is so roughly typical; everyone writes about this kind of situation. But it's descriptive enough.


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Posted 09 October 2009 - 02:36 PM ( #4 )

^^ Heyheyhey, she's writing about it 'cause that's how she feels, and I've been through this and I know it hurts. So just be careful about what you say..

It's a great poem, Becca, I really like it. I only wish you didn't feel that way ):

You always told me, 'you are your worst critic', and you must be right, 'cause we all think you're beautiful here (:
And we'd still love you, even if you weren't, because you're just amazing on the inside.
Hoping that doesn't sound too corny..


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Posted 09 October 2009 - 07:56 PM ( #5 )

This poem was very choppy. It jumps around from one thing to another without any of the rhythm that makes a poem majestic and flowy. If you practice writing some more, you will improve. So if you're serious about your writing, practice makes perfect. (: