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Posted 08 October 2009 - 11:22 PM ( #1 )

Your name would be what I carve into that bullet,
What I write on the knife's blade.
Your name would be the last thing I say as I jump.
It's you who I'd think about as I hit the ground,
But forget about as death takes me.


I have no idea what the inspration for it was, and why I'm sharing it with you.
But what do you think?

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Posted 12 October 2009 - 12:16 PM ( #2 )

Yes, it's good, in a depressing sort of way. P:

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Posted 12 October 2009 - 12:23 PM ( #3 )

It's not bad, but it doesn't sound very poetic. I don't really like the way it flows, if you know what I mean. It's a bit choppy. If you change your wording around a bit, I bet it could sound a lot better. But it's a fairly good start. (:

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Posted 15 October 2009 - 04:39 AM ( #4 )

I'm not the kind of person who does rhyming poems.
I am a fail writer. And I accept that.

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Posted 15 October 2009 - 10:45 AM ( #5 )

I like it!
Alot!
(: <3

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Posted 16 October 2009 - 03:29 AM ( #6 )

Thanks, Kendal, I think that was my whole motive.
Thanks, Nikki, that really helped, but I don't think I'm going to turn it into a whole writing project.
And thanks Keeley, that just brightened me up.

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Posted 21 November 2009 - 08:07 PM ( #7 )

It's better than any poem/story (okay, maybe not story) I've ever written.

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Posted 14 February 2010 - 01:29 AM ( #8 )

beautiful in a terryfying way my kinda poettry
i love dark poetry like edgar allan poe

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Posted 17 February 2010 - 06:37 PM ( #9 )

Very nice. It seems inspirational, though I can't quite describe it. I like it. (:

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Posted 18 February 2010 - 02:35 PM ( #10 )

Yes, it's good, in a depressing sort of way. P:

Did I really say that? O:
I think it's amazing.