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lainabug01

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Posted 09 October 2009 - 07:06 PM ( #1 )

It's about music.
Don't say it's stupid or anything, okay?

Music is a living thing;
It moves and flows,
Music is something that
you never truly know,
Music is an art;
it comes from your
soul and heart,
Music is a way
I can just be me,
Music is a way I can..
Be free.

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Posted 09 October 2009 - 07:58 PM ( #2 )

Be careful with what words you use to make your rhymes. Sometimes it can come off as childish if you rhyme with something silly, and look like you're trying too hard. It was fairly good, but if you practice your rhyme & rhythm some more you could make it even better. (: