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x.xRainingx.xSunshinex.x

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Posted 06 December 2009 - 07:53 AM ( #1 )

Broken glass against the flesh,
The torn palm and the sound of blood dripping from your skin,(Drip Drop)
the shatterd glass on the floor crackling under your feet,(Crackle Crackle)
the trapped souls shout for help and mercy,
you start to hear the bells,
the heat,

OF HELL~

Edited by x.xRainingx.xSunshinex.x, 06 December 2009 - 07:54 AM.


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Posted 06 December 2009 - 03:19 PM ( #2 )

Um, it's a little... gory. x.x
I mean, it has potential, but at the moment I really don't think everything flows together. Maybe you'd want to add a little to it?

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Posted 07 December 2009 - 04:38 PM ( #3 )

Thanks. Yes, it is gory, but thats the way I wanted it to be.
Last year, I was joking around with the teacher and I told her I was gonna eat her, I thought it was funny....
Until they sent me to the guidence counsuler.XD I have problems.