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Pink Hippopotumas

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Posted 19 December 2009 - 03:00 AM ( #1 )

ok this is my song. It is called stop living a fantasy:

verse one
one night, when I was dreaming
I was a princess that everyone was seeing
but one day I got trapped In a castle
Lost and not bieng found

chorus
(and I said) stop living a fantasy
wake up to the world you see
stop living a fantasy
wake up to the world you see

verse two
one dream I was a mermaid
and I even had My own maid
but then I got tooken away
so far,far away

Repeat chorus.

bridge
and I was dreamin' and dreamin' but I wasn't seein'
was that this isn't real world
and I was playin' and playin' but It just wasn't paying
'cause It's time to wake up

verse three
so now Ill say goodbye to my cherry pie
'cause now I gotta go away
and i'll never know just why
I had this dream anyway.

repeat chorus twice.

THE END

keep in mind I am only nine so it isn't that good.
thanks for reading!
:lol:
from Pink Hippopotumas
aka katieecob
:D :P :hitodetchi:

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monkeez_cutiez

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Posted 19 December 2009 - 03:15 AM ( #2 )

For a nine year old, that is excellent. BESTSELLER HERE PINK HIPPOPOTAMUS COMES!

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Posted 19 December 2009 - 07:05 AM ( #3 )

I like it.

But there's a typo I see. "Tooken" isn't a real word, you'd say "Taken".

But, like most songs, you kinda need a song to sing this to. I like the lyrics.
Since this strikes me as some Taylor Swift-like story, I sang it to a beat like "Our Song". Would that be accurate?

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Posted 19 December 2009 - 01:22 PM ( #4 )

Yeah, great job! Keep writing!

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Posted 21 December 2009 - 12:45 AM ( #5 )

to goggle face, it's more like you belong to me.
well,that's what i sort if sounds like.
but I made up my own tune

and OMG,the lyrics actually are
stop living a fantasy
wake up to the world you see
stop living a fantasy
wake up to reality
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oh yeah, if you are cofused why I think this is my post, Pink Hippopotumas is my other account. :)

Edited by katieecob, 21 December 2009 - 12:48 AM.


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Posted 27 December 2009 - 01:35 PM ( #6 )

If I could rate it, I'd give it a six. Cause of the spelling mistakes, and I just find it also a total copy of Taylor Swift's song. Sorry.

- Nine Year Old froggybebe