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Lizzie's Song Part 2


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Emo_Gurl2010

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Posted 21 December 2009 - 06:32 PM ( #1 )

Ummkmm dont judge me too hard Im only 9.

Behind those Hazel Eyes
V1:Sitting in a meadow with all your friends
Talking and laughing thinkin that time has no end
Acting cool but you realley arent
Chorus:But no one...No one knows the seceret
No one knows the truth
that lies
behind those hazel eyes.
V2:Now your lieing there in the meadow all by yourself
Its like an empty world out there waiting to be dicovered.
Keep imagining bout that white horse galloping away
But your still fliping your hair back
Acting cool but you realley arent
Chorus 2x



Not much but something.Give me something out of 10 rating please!

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Emo_Gurl2010

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Posted 23 December 2009 - 12:35 AM ( #2 )

That song is didicated to this popualar girl who loves taytlor swift and allways sings white horse.But if you look into her eyes,you can see she has a seceret.And her name is belle

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Posted 27 December 2009 - 01:30 PM ( #3 )

I'd actually give it a 4. Verse one sounded good, verse two didn't.

-9 year old Lilystar

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Posted 27 December 2009 - 01:32 PM ( #4 )

I'd give a six. Sorry...
But by the way, I have a band too. And I'm also nine.
The reason I give it a six is there are some spelling mistakes.
Plus, the second verse doesn't rhyme.
Secret is spelled secert not seceret.
Aren't is spelled like this, not arent.
Really is spelled really, not realley.