Lizzie's Song Part 2

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Emo_Gurl2010

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Ummkmm dont judge me too hard Im only 9.

[SIZE=21pt]Behind those Hazel Eyes[/SIZE]

V1:Sitting in a meadow with all your friends

Talking and laughing thinkin that time has no end

Acting cool but you realley arent

Chorus:But no one...No one knows the seceret

No one knows the truth

that lies

behind those hazel eyes.

V2:Now your lieing there in the meadow all by yourself

Its like an empty world out there waiting to be dicovered.

Keep imagining bout that white horse galloping away

But your still fliping your hair back

Acting cool but you realley arent

Chorus 2x

Not much but something.Give me something out of 10 rating please!

 
That song is didicated to this popualar girl who loves taytlor swift and allways sings white horse.But if you look into her eyes,you can see she has a seceret.And her name is belle

 
I'd actually give it a 4. Verse one sounded good, verse two didn't.

-9 year old Lilystar

 
I'd give a six. Sorry...

But by the way, I have a band too. And I'm also nine.

The reason I give it a six is there are some spelling mistakes.

Plus, the second verse doesn't rhyme.

Secret is spelled secert not seceret.

Aren't is spelled like this, not arent.

Really is spelled really, not realley.

 

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