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Posted 18 February 2010 - 11:11 AM ( #1 )

Critism?

For every Lie I've told you
For every Objection I've made
For every Violent outburst
For every Easy route I've taken
It was just to make you love me.

For every Neverending fight
For every Empty hug I gave
For every Enivious thought I've thunk
For every Dirty action I've made
It was just to make you need me.

For every Point I've argued against
For every Exhausted sigh I've sighed
For every Arrogant word I've said
For every Critism I've given you
For every Enticement I've put you through
It was just to make you be at peace with me.


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Posted 18 February 2010 - 11:18 AM ( #2 )

Kendal, I love it so much.
You've asked for critism, I can't give it. <3
LOVE NEED PEACE.
It was only by the end that I realised that part.
Is their anything not to love about that?
I'm like a proud mother now. :'D

Edited by Oh Star.x, 18 February 2010 - 11:18 AM.


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Posted 18 February 2010 - 01:11 PM ( #3 )

LOL. Thank you, Keeley. :'D

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Posted 28 February 2010 - 07:29 PM ( #4 )

Pretty good. ;D