"Zombie Chaser"

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xxxkiroxxx

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This is my poem "Zombie Chaser". I wrote it in 3rd hour Language Arts ^____^

There's a zombie chasing me.

I can't believe it, this can't be.

I hope I'm fast enough.

Because if I'm not, the consequences will be tough.

I'm an unarmed zombie chaser.

Dream erasers.

The zombies are fast.

My life has passed.

Among the ranks of the walking dead.

I can't wait to see what's ahead.

What do you guys think?

 
It's okay! I mean, for something you just threw together out of pure boredom it's pretty okay. My suggestion to you is that, next time when you write a poem or feel like editing this one, you should find a good rhyme scheme and go with it. It helps poems that contain constant rhyme to flow much better. Of course, some poems are a little off on the rhyme scheme because it is for effect. But I personally prefer some kind of rhyme scheme to go with :)

 
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As stated above, it's great for something that you threw together while bored! :] If you do happen to edit it though, just remember that poems don't have to rhyme (though I like it when they do... :p ) but it's the rhythm that sets them off nicely. This poem rhymes well, but some of the lines lose their rhythm.

Love the concept too, though!

 
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