Posted 22 February 2012 - 02:36 AM
She had always thought of him as childish. A fool, following that silver-haired freak. The way he would go "Yes Mr Anubias!", he was really silly
She had always thought of him as stupid, when they used to pass notes in class, and the way he'd try win her over;
I like you, I like you a lot
He would scrawl in that almost unreadable scribble
Would you like a date?
She remembered the scowls she would put on for him as she scanned the mess he made
Then back around it went
No. I do not love you, and I am busy! Besides, you're much too childish!
She remembered the pang she felt as she saw the boy turn around, heartbroken.
She had always thought of herself as magnificent.
Following that bright light around. Beautiful, graceful, magnificent. Horrible, Evil, Destructive
That Dan boy got in their way. He was stupid, annoying, selfish. Friendly. Nice. Helpful.
Soon – Sister-like. Proper. A lady.
Robin – Silent. Tough on the outside. Soft centre.
Ben, Jack, Anubias - Might, in all their glory.
Stupid, Childish, Annoying.
Posted 26 February 2012 - 03:08 AM
Aside from a few unintentional typos this was great! Very well written! A little on the mysterious side seeing as I didn't know what was going on toward the ending but it was captivating all the same. Bravo!