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Posted 01 November 2012 - 09:10 AM ( #1 )

Here's another random poem I wrote. I tried to make the meaning more obvious, but since most people are tuned in to love songs and this is NOT a love song, you still might not get it.

One of them said I'm good at maths and writing.
The other one said that they don't matter.
Then they said I should be confiding in others,
Not spending every minute in the shadows.

So I said, they aren't worth talking to
Then they said, who to judge them are you?
I said I had talked to them but they said to try again
I'd given them only one chance back then.

So I gave them a chance, over and over.
And every time they let me down.
I just gave up and said it was over.
I wouldn't try to make any friends now.

But they persisted, they seemed to like me
So I thought, exactly how much harm could it be?
I wasn't right though, I fell into their trap.
And now I've decided I really won't try again.
I won't ever, ever, try to have friends.

This obviously doesn't mean what you might think. It doesn't mean I don't want to have any friends any more. It means I won't take part in one aspect of friendship - telling anyone things I don't want others to know, because I've never been able to work out the right person to trust and I've almost ended up banned from TamaTalk several times because I told people things I shouldn't have.

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Posted 02 November 2012 - 05:46 AM ( #2 )

That's nice.

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Posted 02 November 2012 - 06:48 AM ( #3 )

EMF, please don't believe it is directed at you. It is not.

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Posted 03 November 2012 - 07:06 AM ( #4 )

I know. :P It's a really good poem, and I can relate to it a lot. You are really talented, Dazzmina.

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Posted 03 November 2012 - 10:36 AM ( #5 )

I don't want you to say stuff you don't mean. All I want is for you to not be sarcastic or say it's directed at you. Sorry about getting mad at you over it though.

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Posted 04 November 2012 - 12:35 AM ( #6 )

Awesome poem! The words you used like "persisted" and "confiding" really made the poem special. :)

Just one tiny thing - Could you think of a name of your poems? That would be awesome, especially because you write such good poems! :D

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Posted 04 November 2012 - 07:27 AM ( #7 )

Okay. The name for this one is...I Won't Try Again.
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Posted 15 November 2012 - 11:45 PM ( #8 )

Whoa. At first I thought this was about teachers and parents. But I guess I was wrong.
Your poem is slightly depressing, but very, very good. I've never been able to write poems about feelings/friendship, I instead write things about objects and how they relate to emotions? If that makes sense.
Anyway, why are you trying to stop writing poems? It's evidently something you enjoy, find comforting, and are good at, so why not write some more? It gives us free literature! :D
(And if people get offended by it, just add that IT'S NOTHING PERSONAL!!!)