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mimitchi ^o^

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Posted 14 February 2013 - 10:00 PM ( #1 )

A poem by me. It kinda sucks.


I trust you.
I mean, I think I do.
I know I want to,
But I dont like what we've been through.

You tell me I can trust.
You tell me that I must.
But then you spread things behind my back.
All the things I wish I lack.

Maybe I don't know you well enough.
Maybe I shouldn't try.
But then I pretend that im tough,
And let you tell another lie.

I've had enough, I want to be over.
But then you rebloom like a clover.
I should have known it was an act.
I wasn't prepared for the impact.

Depression decides to stay with me.
Everyone has let me be.
Except for you, with your fun.
I start to think that you have won.

Then someone sticks up to you.
Someone who will go through.
Your reign is over, you've met an end.
And still you try to be my friend.

I let you try again.
Why was I so stupid?
When you tried to make amends,
I thought you were struck by cupid.

But once again your devilish side,
Takes a turn and begins to stride.
I laugh now, it was a pathetic attempt.
And I decided to exempt,

All the tries I had in me,
All on trying to set you free.
Don't follow me now, you're all alone,
With the personality you have shown.



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Posted 07 June 2013 - 09:58 AM ( #2 )

It's really good. It's got a good message that isn't about love, making it better than most other poems. :)



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Posted 26 July 2013 - 03:36 AM ( #3 )

It's really good.  I love how it rhymes and the structure looks pretty.