POEMS!

OKAY! so does any one have good poems?!?! iff you do, reply and ill rate them!!

um... mine?

I made a 28 lined, 14 couplet poem about Ramayana for my World Cultures class. Not that good, but here it is!

RAMAYANA

By: nickname:Flipper

King Dasharata wanted a son

So he thought a sacrifice would be fun

Meanwhile, the gods were tormented by Ravana very badly

And a Demon or god can’t defeat him, very sadly

So they granted the King’s wish

And gave him some pudding delish

Queen Kausalya got ½ and his other 2 wives plit the rest

Queen Kaikeyi didn’t want Rama to be King so she said Bharata would be best

Although the request was latish

The King granted her wish

This is what the King feared

For Rama was sent to the forest for 14 years

His family wanted to come too

But only Lakshmana and Sita Came through

Then came Suprpanaka, wanting to marry Rama

She got “dised” and went to get help from Khara and Ravana

Ravana kidnapped Rama’s wife

And Sita screamed for her life

Hanuman finds Sita’s ring

Rama sents Hanuman with it so Sita knows it’s the real thing

Ravana Captured Hanuman in dire

Then set his tail on fire

In the distance, Rama had an army of monkeys and bears

Ravana called out for Kumbhakarna’s help, of the battle he was aware

Ravana and his minions died

And Rama defeated them all with pride

They went back to Rama’s Castle

All living happily ever after!

THE END! ^^

people eat

smelly feat

that tastes good

well, its better than wood

crazy kids

that looked like pigs

[tone=sarcasm] o, wasnt that just LOVLY! [/sarcasm]

i was preety bored

lol

people eatsmelly feat

that tastes good

well, its better than wood

crazy kids

that looked like pigs

[tone=sarcasm] o, wasnt that just LOVLY! [/sarcasm]

i was preety bored

lol

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cool! I give yours a 9 out of ten. Or in a letter ( there made up letters) a C/r for creative and rymeing

I made a 28 lined, 14 couplet poem about Ramayana for my World Cultures class. Not that good, but here it is!
RAMAYANA

By: nickname:Flipper

King Dasharata wanted a son

So he thought a sacrifice would be fun

Meanwhile, the gods were tormented by Ravana very badly

And a Demon or god can’t defeat him, very sadly

So they granted the King’s wish

And gave him some pudding delish

Queen Kausalya got ½ and his other 2 wives plit the rest

Queen Kaikeyi didn’t want Rama to be King so she said Bharata would be best

Although the request was latish

The King granted her wish

This is what the King feared

For Rama was sent to the forest for 14 years

His family wanted to come too

But only Lakshmana and Sita Came through

Then came Suprpanaka, wanting to marry Rama

She got “dised” and went to get help from Khara and Ravana

Ravana kidnapped Rama’s wife

And Sita screamed for her life

Hanuman finds Sita’s ring

Rama sents Hanuman with it so Sita knows it’s the real thing

Ravana Captured Hanuman in dire

Then set his tail on fire

In the distance, Rama had an army of monkeys and bears

Ravana called out for Kumbhakarna’s help, of the battle he was aware

Ravana and his minions died

And Rama defeated them all with pride

They went back to Rama’s Castle

All living happily ever after!

THE END! ^^

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I don't know wath to rate that. I think the was a G- Greaat!

Here's mine.

Happiness, love, peace, and joy.

Should be upon every girl and boy.

Happiness means being happy where you are.

Love means having a loved one never far.

Peace means being graceful and kind and never screwed.

Joy means receiving these things back to you.

If you have all 4 of these things you are one of the lucky ones.

Cuz many people have none, the amount being tons and tons.

WOW! I didn't know how bad a poet I was until I wrote this! Here it is, it is terrible, but it's there.

GotchiGirl96

its kind of deppressing but ill write it anyway...

Pain

my back is broken

my tears ache

from words never spoken

yet egnore

my fingers now useless

hang by my side

my feet no longer walk

they glide

i struggle to eat

i turn and twist in my sleep

and even then i have no peace

for i always have bad dreams

and then my dear mother whispers in my ear

no pain no gain my dear

but if this is the pain i have to enduar

i dont think the gain is worth waiting for

it cant be soooo bad because www.poetry.com exepted it as one of the finalits... but i think theyr wrong b/c its not that good.

Here's mine.
Happiness, love, peace, and joy.

Should be upon every girl and boy.

Happiness means being happy where you are.

Love means having a loved one never far.

Peace means being graceful and kind and never screwed.

Joy means receiving these things back to you.

If you have all 4 of these things you are one of the lucky ones.

Cuz many people have none, the amount being tons and tons.

WOW! I didn't know how bad a poet I was until I wrote this! Here it is, it is terrible, but it's there.

GotchiGirl96

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OMG !!!!!! that was sooo goood!! I give it a 10.

its kind of deppressing but ill write it anyway...Pain

my back is broken

my tears ache

from words never spoken

yet egnore

my fingers now useless

hang by my side

my feet no longer walk

they glide

i struggle to eat

i turn and twist in my sleep

and even then i have no peace

for i always have bad dreams

and then my dear mother whispers in my ear

no pain no gain my dear

but if this is the pain i have to enduar

i dont think the gain is worth waiting for

it cant be soooo bad because www.poetry.com exepted it as one of the finalits... but i think theyr wrong b/c its not that good.

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OMG !! that was good to.

here is mine (lenne and shuyin from ff x-2 were my inspiration) and it doesn't rhyme

as i gaze at the horizon

the blue of the ocean matches your eyes

so blue

i'll never be able to look away

as i see you fade

i realize that even though we die

our love lives on

through the dreams and hopes

of those we knew

so as we lay here

against the floor

taking our lasts breaths

i realize that an eternity spent with you

makes up for everything we lose on earth.

wow, bg07 that was good!

Perfect haze

Sunny daze

Smiling children

Everyone's happy once again!

Not really a poem but I thought it was OK for the first time

My poem:

I take a breath in

Because I know my death is soon to come.

If I take one more step

my life will be overwith and done

All I really need know is a chance to say goodbye

to all my friends and family and if not at least a chance to fly

But know that I know I'm going to die

I think that in heaven I will wear a gown and have wings.

So my dream will come true.

I will go down to earth then into the sky, I will fly.

8. Pretty good.

My poem:
I take a breath in

Because I know my death is soon to come.

If I take one more step

my life will be overwith and done

All I really need know is a chance to say goodbye

to all my friends and family and if not at least a chance to fly

But know that I know I'm going to die

I think that in heaven I will wear a gown and have wings.

So my dream will come true.

I will go down to earth then into the sky, I will fly.

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10. AWSZSOME

!!! !!!!

I made a poem, here it is:

The world is a circle full of life, land, and water.

It is full of many daughters.

I listen to the childrens laughter.

I listen to the bible read by my pastor.

I come home everyday and listen to my mom say 'Did you have a good day?'

I ansewer 'Yes. All of the horses where fed to much hay!'

Its horrible!!