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Posted 24 December 2006 - 03:28 PM ( #1 )

OKAY! so does any one have good poems?!?! iff you do, reply and ill rate them!!

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Posted 24 December 2006 - 06:23 PM ( #2 )

um... mine?

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Posted 24 December 2006 - 06:36 PM ( #3 )

I made a 28 lined, 14 couplet poem about Ramayana for my World Cultures class. Not that good, but here it is! :huh:

RAMAYANA
By: nickname:Flipper

King Dasharata wanted a son
So he thought a sacrifice would be fun

Meanwhile, the gods were tormented by Ravana very badly
And a Demon or god can’t defeat him, very sadly

So they granted the King’s wish
And gave him some pudding delish

Queen Kausalya got ½ and his other 2 wives plit the rest
Queen Kaikeyi didn’t want Rama to be King so she said Bharata would be best

Although the request was latish
The King granted her wish

This is what the King feared
For Rama was sent to the forest for 14 years

His family wanted to come too
But only Lakshmana and Sita Came through

Then came Suprpanaka, wanting to marry Rama
She got “dised” and went to get help from Khara and Ravana

Ravana kidnapped Rama’s wife
And Sita screamed for her life

Hanuman finds Sita’s ring
Rama sents Hanuman with it so Sita knows it’s the real thing

Ravana Captured Hanuman in dire
Then set his tail on fire

In the distance, Rama had an army of monkeys and bears
Ravana called out for Kumbhakarna’s help, of the battle he was aware

Ravana and his minions died
And Rama defeated them all with pride

They went back to Rama’s Castle
All living happily ever after!

THE END! ^^

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Posted 24 December 2006 - 06:46 PM ( #4 )

people eat
smelly feat
that tastes good
well, its better than wood
crazy kids
that looked like pigs

[tone=sarcasm] o, wasnt that just LOVLY! [/sarcasm]

i was preety bored
lol

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Posted 24 December 2006 - 06:50 PM ( #5 )

people eat
smelly feat
that tastes good
well, its better than wood
crazy kids
that looked like pigs

[tone=sarcasm] o, wasnt that just LOVLY! [/sarcasm]

i was preety bored
lol

cool! I give yours a 9 out of ten. Or in a letter ( there made up letters) a C/r for creative and rymeing

Edited by yo!allyrox, 24 December 2006 - 06:54 PM.


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Posted 24 December 2006 - 06:53 PM ( #6 )

I made a 28 lined, 14 couplet poem about Ramayana for my World Cultures class. Not that good, but here it is! :huh:

RAMAYANA
By: nickname:Flipper

King Dasharata wanted a son
So he thought a sacrifice would be fun

Meanwhile, the gods were tormented by Ravana very badly
And a Demon or god can’t defeat him, very sadly

So they granted the King’s wish
And gave him some pudding delish

Queen Kausalya got ½ and his other 2 wives plit the rest
Queen Kaikeyi didn’t want Rama to be King so she said Bharata would be best

Although the request was latish
The King granted her wish

This is what the King feared
For Rama was sent to the forest for 14 years

His family wanted to come too
But only Lakshmana and Sita Came through

Then came Suprpanaka, wanting to marry Rama
She got “dised” and went to get help from Khara and Ravana

Ravana kidnapped Rama’s wife
And Sita screamed for her life

Hanuman finds Sita’s ring
Rama sents Hanuman with it so Sita knows it’s the real thing

Ravana Captured Hanuman in dire
Then set his tail on fire

In the distance, Rama had an army of monkeys and bears
Ravana called out for Kumbhakarna’s help, of the battle he was aware

Ravana and his minions died
And Rama defeated them all with pride

They went back to Rama’s Castle
All living happily ever after!

THE END! ^^

I don't know wath to rate that. I think the was a G- Greaat!

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Posted 24 December 2006 - 09:40 PM ( #7 )

Here's mine.

Happiness, love, peace, and joy.
Should be upon every girl and boy.
Happiness means being happy where you are.
Love means having a loved one never far.
Peace means being graceful and kind and never screwed.
Joy means receiving these things back to you.
If you have all 4 of these things you are one of the lucky ones.
Cuz many people have none, the amount being tons and tons.

WOW! I didn't know how bad a poet I was until I wrote this! Here it is, it is terrible, but it's there.

GotchiGirl96

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Posted 24 December 2006 - 09:46 PM ( #8 )

its kind of deppressing but ill write it anyway...
Pain

my back is broken
my tears ache
from words never spoken
yet egnore
my fingers now useless
hang by my side
my feet no longer walk
they glide
i struggle to eat
i turn and twist in my sleep
and even then i have no peace
for i always have bad dreams
and then my dear mother whispers in my ear
no pain no gain my dear
but if this is the pain i have to enduar
i dont think the gain is worth waiting for


it cant be soooo bad because www.poetry.com exepted it as one of the finalits... but i think theyr wrong b/c its not that good.

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Posted 25 December 2006 - 04:55 PM ( #9 )

Here's mine.

Happiness, love, peace, and joy.
Should be upon every girl and boy.
Happiness means being happy where you are.
Love means having a loved one never far.
Peace means being graceful and kind and never screwed.
Joy means receiving these things back to you.
If you have all 4 of these things you are one of the lucky ones.
Cuz many people have none, the amount being tons and tons.

WOW! I didn't know how bad a poet I was until I wrote this! Here it is, it is terrible, but it's there.

GotchiGirl96

OMG !!!!!! that was sooo goood!! I give it a 10.

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Posted 25 December 2006 - 04:57 PM ( #10 )

its kind of deppressing but ill write it anyway...
Pain

my back is broken
my tears ache
from words never spoken
yet egnore
my fingers now useless
hang by my side
my feet no longer walk
they glide
i struggle to eat
i turn and twist in my sleep
and even then i have no peace
for i always have bad dreams
and then my dear mother whispers in my ear
no pain no gain my dear
but if this is the pain i have to enduar
i dont think the gain is worth waiting for


it cant be soooo bad because www.poetry.com exepted it as one of the finalits... but i think theyr wrong b/c its not that good.

OMG !! that was good to.

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Posted 25 December 2006 - 05:03 PM ( #11 )

here is mine (lenne and shuyin from ff x-2 were my inspiration) and it doesn't rhyme

as i gaze at the horizon
the blue of the ocean matches your eyes
so blue
i'll never be able to look away
as i see you fade
i realize that even though we die
our love lives on
through the dreams and hopes
of those we knew
so as we lay here
against the floor
taking our lasts breaths
i realize that an eternity spent with you
makes up for everything we lose on earth.

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Posted 25 December 2006 - 05:15 PM ( #12 )

wow, bg07 that was good!

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Posted 25 December 2006 - 05:34 PM ( #13 )

Perfect haze
Sunny daze
Smiling children
Everyone's happy once again!

Not really a poem but I thought it was OK for the first time

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Posted 25 December 2006 - 05:48 PM ( #14 )

My poem:

I take a breath in
Because I know my death is soon to come.
If I take one more step
my life will be overwith and done
All I really need know is a chance to say goodbye
to all my friends and family and if not at least a chance to fly
But know that I know I'm going to die
I think that in heaven I will wear a gown and have wings.
So my dream will come true.
I will go down to earth then into the sky, I will fly.

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Posted 25 December 2006 - 06:18 PM ( #15 )

8. Pretty good.

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Posted 25 December 2006 - 06:22 PM ( #16 )

My poem:

I take a breath in
Because I know my death is soon to come.
If I take one more step
my life will be overwith and done
All I really need know is a chance to say goodbye
to all my friends and family and if not at least a chance to fly
But know that I know I'm going to die
I think that in heaven I will wear a gown and have wings.
So my dream will come true.
I will go down to earth then into the sky, I will fly.

10. AWSZSOME
!!! :( :) ;) !!!!

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Posted 25 December 2006 - 06:32 PM ( #17 )

I made a poem, here it is:

The world is a circle full of life, land, and water.
It is full of many daughters.
I listen to the childrens laughter.
I listen to the bible read by my pastor.
I come home everyday and listen to my mom say 'Did you have a good day?'
I ansewer 'Yes. All of the horses where fed to much hay!'

Its horrible!!