Here's my poem!

OK, I don't expect to be flattered and I would rather have constructive critscism than lies. But keep it polite please:

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You turned around

When I called your name

I smiled, you frowned

So I knew it weren't the same.

You looked at me

I looked at you

But I didn't see

What I wanted to.

You walked away

And didn't look back

I felt so stiff like I was made of clay

My heart felt like it was going to crack.

My best friends called and asked "Was I OK?"

But something inside me told me not to say

Nothings changed now it's been so long

I just fake smiled and said "hey!"

So there's no possible way to tell

If you rember the girl down the street.

So I shrugged it off, You don't love me,

I wish you well.

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Well, it's not the best but I'm no great shakes at poetry.

I think it is very good. Sure its not the best in the world, but hey, nobodys perfect!

Aw, thanks!

Yeah, English is my best subject but I'm better at writing fiction stories than poems.

it's real good what do u think of mine...

listen to what

i have to say

i love u like this

just this way

ur special to me

u noe it's true

that's the reason i love u!

Aw, thanks!
Yeah, English is my best subject but I'm better at writing fiction stories than poems.

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Your welcome!