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    I lov cows and fish<br>but my cows eat my fish then i eat my cow

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  1. im giving my siggie a 8/10. What do u guys think?
  2. It's a ok poem but a little fictional and imaginative. It's hard to beileve but keep practising, you will get the hang of it.
  3. You are really good. You should make your book. But I think that it would be a good idea to put morals in your poems. (And I <3 your none rhyming poems bette, im not a rhyming poem fan)
  4. Hey, it's not bad for a beginner. But you want to make your poems a little less cheesy and make them more deep. Try to write things that get's you to think and get the reader to imagine he or she is sort of in the poem. It sounds funny, but it's like when you read a really good book. And a hint: (Rhyming poems are not always the best, try some haikus or just non rhyming poems. But make sure the poem flows)
  5. I like the romance at the end. Actually, you have romance in a nice few of your poems. Is it about someone you like or something? :|
  6. My favorite, melodie of the rain. And if you published a poetry book I would buy it. (I like your none rhyming poems better)
  7. Thanx, your replies are really helping!
  8. Rhyming poems are really tricky, so for class try to come up with some, but on Tamatalk I <3 your non rhyming poems. There sooo deep and meaningful. You should try to improve your rhyming skills some more but poems that don't rhyme have such a beautiful meaning. Keep up the good work.
  9. Wow, that's a deep, deep poem. It really get's you thinking, im going to give it an 8/10. Very beautiful Poem Jinx, Keep it up!
  10. Storms let me be honest with you.... YOUR AN AWSOME POET!!!!!!!
  11. I declaire STORMS the BEST TAMATALK POET EVER!!!!!!!!!!! Keep the AWSOME work!!!!!!!!!
  12. My name is Lilly I am but three, My eyes are swollen I cannot see, I must be stupid I must be bad, What else could have made My daddy so mad? I wish I were better I wish I weren't ugly, Then maybe my mommy Would still want to hug me. I can't speak at all I can't do a wrong Or else I'm locked up All the day long. When I awake I'm all alone The house is dark My folks aren't home When my mommy does come I'll try and be nice, So maybe I'll get just One whipping tonight. Don't make a sound! I just heard a car My daddy is back From Charlie's Bar. I hear him curse My name he calls I press myself Against the wall I try and hide From his evil eyes I'm so afraid now I'm starting to cry He finds me weeping He shouts ugly words, He says its my fault That he suffers at work. He slaps me and hits me And yells at me more, I finally get free And I run for the door. He's already locked it And I start to bawl, He takes me and throws me Against the hard wall. I fall to the floor With my bones nearly broken, And my daddy continues With more bad words spoken. 'I'm sorry!', I scream But its now much too late His face has been twisted Into unimaginable hate The hurt and the pain Again and again Oh please God, have mercy! Oh please let it end! And he finally stops And heads for the door, While I lay there motionless Sprawled on the floor My name is Lilly And I am but three, Tonight my daddy Murdered me.
  13. That's the BEST romance poem I have EVER heard. Keep it up, your going to be a famous poet some day!
  14. Hey, I see alot of ppl with really cool signatures and I was wondering if everybody could post there favorite signatures here. It would be awsome! Thanx ~Fishfreak