Peom I wrote

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greendaygirl829

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My heart skips a beat,

A feel a tingle in my feet,

I studder and stare,

But all I can see is her hair,

She flips it around,

Making not a sound,

I know it could never come true,

Just me and you...

I know it sounds cheesy and you might not like it but thats all I could think of.

 
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That's really good. It's kinda a coinicdence because you just postefd about ur crush and his girlfriend and I posted back lol. But that's a really good poem.

 
Hey, it's not bad for a beginner. But you want to make your poems a little less cheesy and make them more deep. Try to write things that get's you to think and get the reader to imagine he or she is sort of in the poem. It sounds funny, but it's like when you read a really good book. And a hint: (Rhyming poems are not always the best, try some haikus or just non rhyming poems. But make sure the poem flows)

 

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