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So yeah, I was listening to Short Stack while writing this song. I think it's my best song yet, but that's just me. I actually really like it. I haven't thought of a name, so suggestions would be good. I'd love feedback, as well.

Hatred born from a friendship no one believed,

Love is hiding deep in the bottom of the sea,

Shaking and shivering,

Lying and considering,

Draw these bullets just a little closer.

 

Leave your knives behind,

Drop the bullets inside your mind,

Watch the world come down right behind me,

I'll bring them something they've never seen,

Pretend we're all we used to be.

 

Hold close the one you don't see,

Say goodbye to fading memories,

Whisper words that were meant for me,

Let's stay behind as you claim the city.

 

Leave your knives behind,

Drop the bullets inside your mind,

Watch the world come down right behind me,

I'll bring them something they've never seen,

Pretend we're all we used to be.

 

Everyone lies,

She never cries,

Hate can't die,

Her eyes are dry,

She hasn't cried.

 

Leave your knives behind,

Drop the bullets inside your mind,

Watch the world come down right behind me,

I'll bring them something they've never seen,

Pretend we're all we used to be.

 

She lies,

For everyone has to cry,

But no matter,

Her eyes remain dry.

 

Knives laced with morphine,

No one heard her silent screams,

Everyone saw her dry eyes,

For she can't cry,

They left her in harmony.

 
Oh my gosh, Britt. You are so talented. <3

Hmm, title suggestions... I would name it "Fading Memories"

 
I love it. :3

I think a good song name would be She Never Cries, considering that line is used more than once [or She Can't Cry, or She Hasn't Cried. Whatever].

Beautiful, Britt. <3

 
Britt.

You are one of the most talented people I've ever talked to.

Especially for your age. I couldn't write a song as amazing as that if my life depended on it.

Short Stack bring out the best in everyone. :)

 
Gosh, Britt.. I envy you.

I want to be able to write songs for myself. Sure, I haven't really tried that hard, but I know I could never write anything like this..

I feel so inferior xDDDD

I love it, though. And keep doing what you're doing, your songs are beautiful :3

 
Your so talented! The last and and first time I wrote a song was in fourth grade. One of the lines was "I'm messed up like a person in a blender" By that you can tell it was a terrible song.

I'm gonna go listen to Short Stack right now...

 
^ Shayna, you will like 'em :)

They are the most amazing people everrrr.

Britt. I have a request;

WRITE MORE SONGSSSS!

 
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