Recent content by White_Roses2

Alright, so, I'm writing a story, and the two main characters kissed... but I don't know what to write after it? Here's the kiss: We both look at each other, smiles pasted on our faces. I flush, glancing down at the ground underneath our hands. His hand moves to hold mine. His right holds my...

Heya! No posts for like a month :| Anyhoo... this might be easier for all of us :D : I've posted it on FictionPress.com, so that way it's easier to edit n stuff. Also alot of the middle changed, and it's no where near where it was up to before. It will take time before it is. So anyway...

Hi... haven't posted anything for a while, but I kind of started writing a chapter in between after Rose fights Scarlett and when Envy comes to find her in the morning... it's not finished yet but it got really confusing because I have to add in another 2 and a half chapters in the middle of it...

Um... ignore this post. Accidentally clicked the post button then wanted to write more, so I stopped the loading... but it posted anyway D:

Chapter 1 Damien takes me by the wrist and leads me through the trees, away from the river. We emerge into a large clearing. The back entrance to the mansion stands out clearly through the trees. He stops and turns to me with a smile on his face, though it soon fades. “I’m sorry,” He begins...

end of that chapter :) also ignore the last post because i edited it so here it is again ** The week passes well, to my delight. On Wednesday, Envy met me a few streets from the school. He walked me to school, smiling all the way, and home again. On Thursday he was around the corner of my...

Prologue I stand alone in the dark night. This is the way it would be for me. Forever. At least, in this world. It was the lake. I left my simple village house in the night to drink from the Sacred Lake. I was told that anyone who drank from the Sacred Lake would be blessed. But it wasn’t...

slightly more :ph34r: The week passes the way I expected it to. On Wednesday, Envy met me in the exact same spot as Tuesday. He walked me to school, then home again. On Thursday he waited at the end of my street. He held my hand on the way to school. After school, Envy has to be home as soon...

Haha :mellow: thanks. That's a good idea since the sisters aren't really involved in the story very much.

I've got around half a chapter... I don't know how to continue. Chapter 6: Possibly My eyes flicker from Envy to my burnt hand and back. I open my mouth to speak, but no words come out. I don't know what to say. My mouth remains open for another second, before I move my head to face ground...

Good. Very good. Just remember to check you writing. I think you made a few mistakes. For example: 'I shoved me' XD lol how do you shove yourself? I'm pretty sure you meant 'He shoved me'?

Wow, that is really REALLY well written. Only two things: 'My brother always teased me and hurt me alot.' and 'I thrashed about but the tight grip had me caught.' These parts don't quite seem to fit in with the rest of the writing Maybe something more like 'My brother had always abused me...

BTW, I'm moving house this Thursday, so I won't be writing for a few days.

YAY! xD I LOVE ENVY TOO <3!!!

Here is chapter 5 :D Um - warning: Scarlett likes to insult Rose. I bleeped the not so kid friendly words Chapter 5: Ruined That perfect moment only lasts for ten seconds. Someone pulls me to the ground by my hair. "Hey, b**ch, get off my man." She says. It's Scarlett. "And Envy, you stupid...