Posted 07 November 2009 - 08:33 AM
I walked inside the cabin, greeted by gasps, followed by "Who are you?" "Where did you come from?" "How did you find out about this place?"
I stood in the doorway, frozen in fear, surprised to find anyone. I was too scared to answer their questions.
"I said 'who are you?'" said a blond boy who looked to be around fourteen or fifteen.
"I-I'm Kayte." I nervously said."W-where am I?"
"Who we are isn't important right now. All we want to know is why you're here." Said a dark-haired girl, obviously a lot older than me.
I started to cry. "What do you mean!?" I shrieked. "I don't know where I am, and you expect me to explain why I'm here!?"
A blond girl looked at the boy as if to say 'Give her a break!' She looked at me.
"Sorry about that. It's just that we really can't trust anyone right now" she told me. "I'm Lin, and the boy is my brother Ren. That other girl is Malinda."
Malinda looked at me. She was trying to be polite. "Hello, Kayte." I don't think she trusted me much, yet.
I looked at an old, torn apart couch and sat down. "So where am I?"
"The country is called Rapture. It is ruled by the evil king Tonga." Ren explained to me. I gave him a blank look. "You do know who he is, don't you?" he asked. I shook my head.
"Tonga is an evil man who has ruled this land for many years. He is a nasty man, killing every man, woman, and child who dares stand in his way." Lin told me.
"Oh, and by the way." Malinda said. "All this is in a book, none of it is real. Do you remember anything about a book?"
I nodded. "Yes. My grandmother gave me a book for Christmas, today. I ran up to my room, read a few words, then I didn't know where I was."
"OH SHOOT!" Lin exclaimed. "Christmas! Today's Christmas, and we forgot all about it!"
"Lin, hush!" Malinda scolded. "If Tonga was outside right now, he could have came in and killed us!"
"Oh, Mal. Lighten up." Ren told her.
I couldn't help but laugh. "This man can't be too deathly, can he?" I asked. "I mean, he's only a single person, after all."
"Wrong." Ren said. "He has an army of thousands. They came here not too long ago and destroyed the entire village. We're lucky to be alive this very moment."
Now I was scared.
Malinda nodded. "Yeah. Some of his men even left his army because they were afraid of him. Very few of those people are alive right now."
I nodded, my full attention was on them. "So is it possible to get back to the real world?" I asked.
"It's hard, but not completely impossible." Lin explained. "A girl, an extongarian mind you, came here yesterday to give us some advise. She told us that only Tonga has the power to get is back to the real world. While that is very hard to get him to do that, it's not completely impossible."
I gasped, as did the others, as I heard a scream coming from outside the cabin.....
Edited by K Time, 07 November 2009 - 08:37 AM.
Posted 07 November 2009 - 08:54 AM
Yay Lin, for her ditzy "CHRISTMAS! D:" shouting.
Posted 07 November 2009 - 09:07 AM
No, really it does. Lin takes Kayte clothes shopping and it's funny. Kayte's all "Too frilly" "Too pink" "I dont like long sleves" yeah, Kayte's picky when it comes to clothes. lol
nobutreally. Its really good in Chapter four. And even better in chapter six
Posted 07 November 2009 - 09:10 AM
I guess you have it planned out, then 83
Posted 07 November 2009 - 09:11 AM
Posted 07 November 2009 - 09:12 AM
So it's more harder looking at what to take out rather than what to write.
Posted 07 November 2009 - 09:16 AM
But all I need is the plots. I'm not copying OB word-for-word, plot-for-plot or anything. I just got the basics.
Besides, in the story, like every five chapters (I think) I'm making everything back in the real world for a chapter so the reader gets to understand what's going on back on earth. Makes sense?
Posted 07 November 2009 - 10:10 AM
Posted 07 November 2009 - 10:42 AM