Fallen Angel

[Evanescence]

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[SIZE=10pt]Fallen Angel[/SIZE]

Clip my black wings

Rip them from my shoulders

Let my blood drizzle down my back

And form a pool at my feet

Let me become one of the fallen

I won't cry at all

Drop me from the high sky

And watch me crash and burn

Watch me fall from the sky

Let my body break and shatter

No wings to save me

No arms to catch me

See my wounds grow wider?

These wings are forever gone

I can no longer soar

Never again to touch the clouds

Let my fears flow with my blood

I have nothing to fear now

Let my ears bleed down my neck

I can no longer hear your lies

Don't treat my wounds

I am becoming one of the fallen

I still won't cry

I know that I am meant to be here

My soul will no longer bear any hate

Rip it from me along with my sorrow

I won't look through my eyes with envy

I am not saying I'll be clean though

My wings will never grow

Grow from my mangled body

I've broken my self in every way

To protect me from you

I will never fly again

Just watch the blood flow

Are the wounds really deep?

I can no longer feel it anymore

I will fall to my knees

How could I get any lower?

My hands are covered with blood

It's splattered on my face too

I am not lost

Watch me stand and find my way

I'll never be able to reach high again

I had to get away from it all

I have to fall hard

So I can lose all of it

Along with my wings

I'll free fall till I crash violently

 

[Lily12]

0.0 Wow I really like it. Lots of emotions. Keep on writing that was great. =] Also remember when writing poems in the future make a poem like this that reaches out to us.

 

[Evanescence]

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it! All my poetry is filled with emotions. I wrote one about rumors, entitled "Rumors" (who knew? XD) and if you want to read it let me know!

 

[Tama_guy_123]

I like your poem. i think its great!

 

[PeaceFrog777]

Wow, you are a really good writer! Your poem is filled with emotion and imagery. You should see if you can get it published somewhere!

 

[tamaw/pants]

Wow, that was depressing. I didn't even get to the end. o.o

 

[Evanescence]

Thanks Peacefrog!!! ^,^ I'm glad you enjoyed it

I'm srry tamaw/pants, didn't mean to upset you! :/ ^,^

 

[tamaw/pants]

I'm srry tamaw/pants, didn't mean to upset you! :/ ^,^

Oh no, it's fine.

Really, that could be a compliment to you because that was the theme of your poem.

Great job on getting that depressed feeling in there. ;]

 

[Evanescence]

Haha thanks...

but I am sad to say that compared with other depressing poetry I've written, this looks like a childrens book! Ya, my poems can get that dark lol

 

[Simpletic_Dreams]

o.o

That's so good it's scary xD. I love it! Keep on writing!!

 

[Evanescence]

hahah thanks!

 

[Black_Buster]

My expectations were met. And trust me, when i say something sucks, it does suck. Good for you. You passed

 

[Evanescence]

haha Thanks... i guess? lol

 

[crazyy*tama]

Great poem. I loved it.

 

[Evanescence]

Yay! i'm glad

 

[Tamaguy2]

Thats great!

 

[Evanescence]

I'm really glad so many like it!