Lost On Earth- A Tamagotchi Fan Fiction Pt 1

[kuromametchifan123]

Read it here: https://www.tamatalk.com/IB/topic/179288-lost-on-earth-a-tamagotchi-fan-fiction-pt-1/page__pid__3146293#entry3146293

Just wanted to know what everyone thinks so far! What I could improve on, grammatical mistakes etc.

 

[dazzilitchigirl]

It's great, except that Chocolate Arygle is a V4.5 design, just saying. I like it!

 

[kuromametchifan123]

Oh, ha ha! I was typing pretty late, I must have missed it when I skimmed over it before submitting. Thanks for pointing that out Dazz! I'm glad you like it too!