Me poem

[Cutiepoo2014]

Here it are

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EDITED VERSON:

I love you

But you dont even no

i said it to you once

but you dident listin

when i had that wreck

you wernt there

when i was in the hospital

you dident send me a card

when i came back to school

you dident give me a secand glance

when i talked to you

you dident give me a time of day

i was sad 4 a long time

but i got over it

then finally, finally you said

"i loved you"

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so wa u think?

 

[tamaw/pants]

It would be better if it was more grammaticly correct with punctuations and chat speak taken out.

 

[tamaluver977]

10/12. It was great!

 

[Cutiepoo2014]

It would be better if it was more grammaticly correct with punctuations and chat speak taken out.

well did u like it?

 

[Cutiepoo2014]

10/12. It was great!

thnxz

 

[tamaw/pants]

well did u like it?

Eh, I'm not a poem fan myself, so don't take wheather I like it or not into consideration.

 

[tamagirl_123]

6/10

Sorry, its my opinion.

 

[Cutiepoo2014]

6/10Sorry, its my opinion.

....wa dident u like?

 

[tamaluver977]

Maybe it could use more..flair. It is kinda the same thing over and over. I know poems repeat. But mabe make it a little diffrent at times.

 

[CuteDancingBailey]

6/10Sorry, its my opinion.

Yeah, I rate it a 6/10 too.

1. Check your spelling. (reck is spelt wreck)

2. Take out the chat speak and spell things out.

So, mostly it was they way you used the chat speak stuff.

Other than that, it was pretty ok, I guess. I'm not a poem fan myself.

 

[Cutiepoo2014]

Maybe it could use more..flair. It is kinda the same thing over and over. I know poems repeat. But mabe make it a little diffrent at times.

ok

well ive made better

i just felt like making one!! lol

thnxz 4 bing so nice bout it

 

[Cutiepoo2014]

I'm not a poem fan myself.

the funny thing is,....im not ether!! lol

 

[tamaluver977]

It's not a problem. I write poems quick just for fun. Maybe no chat speak and punctuation.

 

[football princess]

Thats a lovely poem

You should be very proud ^_^

Next time try to make it a bit longer and use the correct words instead of slang and I know you will do great!

Good Luck!

-fp

 

[tamagirl_123]

....wa dident u like?

It needed for: the spelling to be checked, words to be spelled out, and the other thing I can't think of a way to say (type) it!!!!

 

[Cutiepoo2014]

Thats a lovely poem You should be very proud ^_^

Next time try to make it a bit longer and use the correct words instead of slang and I know you will do great!

Good Luck!

-fp

thnxz u!!

Finally,...some one who likes it!!

 

[Cutiepoo2014]

It's not a problem. I write poems quick just for fun. Maybe no chat speak and punctuation.

ok u like the edited verson?

 

[CuteDancingBailey]

the funny thing is,....im not ether!! lol

lol, Sometimes people that aren't poem fans have the power to write great poems. ^_^

 

[Cutiepoo2014]

lol, Sometimes people that aren't poem fans have the power to write great poems. ^_^

yea,....

my friend loves to rite them but,...

not me !!

 

[jerrymouse]

your poem is awesome!!! It's better than my 27 lined poem!!!