My song about Child abuse

[~Red~Rose~]

Ok, I haven't got the music, but read the lyrics and say what you think.

Forgotten.

She sits in the corner (Not noticed)

Wearing the same clothes shes worn for a month

Starved, she is so thin

She is so lonely, she is the

Forgotten

Forgotten

She is not cared for,

She is the

Forgotten

Walkin' outside into sunlight (It blinds her)

She sees so many pretty things

Scared, she runs back inside

Her mom has shouted at her, she is the

Forgotten

Forgotten

She is not cared for,

She is the

Forgotten

The sad truth is this happens many times to

Lots of different children

But together we can make a difference

We can stop this cruelty, they are the

Forgotten

Forgotten

They are not cared for

They are the

Forgotten

Like it? Hate it? comment and give a rate out of 10 please.

 

[~Red~Rose~]

can you please comment?

 

[wilsy]

Fab song, Red rose! I am totally against child abuse, it's just a pitty I couldn't write something as good as that. I'm good at music though!

 

[*CjPirate*]

I like it! Child abuse is really bad im against it 2!

 

[~Red~Rose~]

Thanks. I've written songs before, but it's always hard for me to think of the focus of a song. But once I think of that, it just comes to me. I wrote this in under 5 mins (no joke) It's just natural 4 me

 

[Toast_is_fun]

nice song!

 

[Crystalized]

Nice song.

 

[Squidward is Cool]

I love your song!

I hate child abuse! I just wanna slap those adults that do child abuse!

 

[Tamagirl_Desy]

Your song was good.

Keep writing!

 

[tomrules74185296]

Cool song. I am against Child Abuse, too.

 

[Angel:)]

its really good!!! i wish you could make a tune for it... you are really good!!! you should keep writing!!! id rate it 100% ya know!!!!

 

[Dotty_Is_Hotty]

One word. Awesome.

10/10.

 

[Shadowfire~SF]

8/10 I strangly like it, even though I don't really like songs about pity. That means you did very well ^-% You should sing it and put it on youtube.

 

[~Red~Rose~]

Thanks for all your comments. I've just logged on, and I was nervous to see what people thought. I'll mabye put a new song up soon

 

[blue_husky]

10/10 thats realy good and its for a good purpose too

 

[tamtamkitty07]

8/10

Good message. It got a bit too straight-forward at the end, but it's still really well written.

 

[Ichigotchi_Piggy]

Splendid. Sad. I agree with all of your opinions about child abuse.

 

[VioletetchiGirl101]

10

i have a song

solo: i'm sitting by the wall

in the corner

i got blood on my hands

and on the floor

solo:2 he's just sitting there restless hopeless

i'll want to be gone.

chorus: I want to see the light

I hope i see it soon

i'm laying here hopeless

but i want to be free it's hard for me to leave

i want to though

he cried all night i just want you to see...

i want to be free

solo: he tried to hurt me

he tried to get me to die

he wanted me to commit suicide

he's not a good person

chorus: I want to see the light

I hope i see it soon

i'm laying here hopeless

but i want to be free

but i want to be free it's hard for me to leave

i want to though

he cried all night i just want you to see...

i want to be free

bridge: i'm bloody

i'm lonley

i'm crying out my tears

i'm sad

i'm sorrowful

i am done

free.......

chorus: I want to see the light

I hope i see it soon

i'm laying here hopeless

but i want to be free I want to be free.....

but i want to be free it's hard for me to leave

i want to though

he cried all night i just want you to see...

i want to be free

all i want is to be free

free.....free.... free....