A story I am making..

[~»tamagirl101«~]

Wow, that is really good! I love the descrition! Please post more soon!

 

[GotchiGirl96]

It's alright, but you never even told us what happened. The second part where you explained it did not make sense to me, and please remember to use the words 'you're' and 'your' correctly. It needs a lot of work, but I can see an excellent outcome for this story. Todays fixerupers are tomorrow's bestselling novels!!!!!!!!! Lolz...

 

[~TearsxarexlikexStorms~]

It's alright, but you never even told us what happened. The second part where you explained it did not make sense to me, and please remember to use the words 'you're' and 'your' correctly. It needs a lot of work, but I can see an excellent outcome for this story. Todays fixerupers are tomorrow's bestselling novels!!!!!!!!! Lolz...

Part 1 explains everything. I can except crits, butt you cannot say it doesdn't explain everything, I know that for sure.