My poem!

[mimitchilover]

hi. i am entering a poetry contest and am submitting a poem. i cannot have help with it, so no suggestions please but i think you will like it!

_________________________I Wonder for Another Day_______________________________________________-

I wonder why the ocean's waves

Crash upon the shore.

I wonder why I can't see

That rainbow anymore.

I wonder why the world

Spins around the sun.

And why everyone goes to sleep

When the day is done.

But mostly I wonder

Why I am the only one

Who wonders every night,

From dusk until dawn.

I wonder why I write these words

As I watch the shining sun.

I sit and think anything I can

As another wondrous day is gone.

I wonder why all my friends

Just go along.

They don't mind whether

They get ten dollars or one.

While I, thinking over everything,

Wonder why the moon is gray

And why the sky is black.

And when the stars light up the sky

When the sun will come back.

And of course I wonder

Why I took this path

Into rhyme and poetry

Choosing the descion

That was rarely taken

But finally got some wear

Covering its mossy path.

When others see me doing this

They stare and point their fingers

As my pen scratches the paper,

Leaving an inky trail.

And as I give them my secret smile,

Known only to those near me,

I wonder why they think this.

If you wish to do what I do,

Get ready for a long hard slog,

Although poetry is mostly rhyme and song,

Remember the most important thing of all:

Wonder for another day.

thats my poem! like it?

 

[georgiakate1]

Yes i like it - its nice. Do you really wonder about things that much

 

[mimitchilover]

no. i just wrote about a person that does. and thanks for the compliment. <_< it means a lot to me.

 

[ninjarama]

Awesome poem. I really think you should be Shel Silverstein's heir to the poem buisness! ^_^ <_< :mimitchi:

 

[mimitchilover]

Awesome poem. I really think you should be Shel Silverstein's heir to the poem buisness! :mimitchi:

thanks. although not shel silverstein's, i was thinking more along the lines of Robert Frost or Sara Teasdale.

 

[KellyGirl]

Aww... *wipes away a tear* It's so touching. Great job! *teary eyed*

I am... your humble fan.

 

[tamajoy]

Bravo! I really like that peom!

 

[brennas]

good poem , you shauld change the title to "I wonder" it sounds better and its shorter. you strated to lag on rymming ,you when you stoped rymming the words it pretty much just ruind the poem,im sorry but i dont thnok you ae gogint to win the contest, let alone get close to it =\

 

[ultimatebunnywabbit]

georgeous, juss goergeous!! i luved it!! dya hav animoor poems??

 

[ryta.k2]

nice poem!! that must of taken you a............g..............e................s!

lol

 

[Spring]

thanks. although not shel silverstein's, i was thinking more along the lines of Robert Frost or Sara Teasdale.

have you ever read the poem'Nothing Gold Can Stay' by Robert Frost?

Nature's first green is gold,

her hardest hue to hold.

her early leaf's a flower;

but only so an hour.

then leaf subsides to leaf.

so Eden sank to grief,

so dawn goes down today.

nothing gold can stay.

I myself think that poem is beautiful, and yours is, too.

 

[mimitchilover]

have you ever read the poem'Nothing Gold Can Stay' by Robert Frost?
Nature's first green is gold,

her hardest hue to hold.

her early leaf's a flower;

but only so an hour.

then leaf subsides to leaf.

so Eden sank to grief,

so dawn goes down today.

nothing gold can stay.

I myself think that poem is beautiful, and yours is, too.

no, i haven't, i have just read 'Walking by Woods on a Snowy Evening' and 'The Road Not Taken' and i think they are really good!

 

[tamagirl777]

[SIZE=22pt] [/SIZE] Lol. I know where you read those poems mimitchilover (by Robert Frost!)! And nice poem. I wrote a poem for that contest too, but I don't feel like tpying it...

tamagirl777

 

[mimitchilover]

i know you know. we shall see who is the better poet.... (muahahaha....)

 

[A Tama Called Juke]

Clap..........................................clap....................clap........clap...clap loud applause and cheering

 

[tamagirl777]

i know you know. we shall see who is the better poet.... (muahahaha....)

[SIZE=22pt] Yes, very well, WE SHALL SEE THAT I CONQUER THE WORLD!!! MUHAHAHHAHAHHA!!!! sorry. [/SIZE]

tamagirl777

 

[mimitchilover]

anyways, thanks for the compliments everyone! i am quite glad i put this on tamatalk. i am very proud.