poems i made!

[lilmissgotchi]

read and coment plz! p.s. i dont need to read all of them! ^_^

laying in the grass,

looking up at the night time sky,

red, white, and blue,

colors in the sky,

loud noises every were u go,

colorfull foods for all to eat,

U.S. flags in all kids hands,

4th of July is a holliday to me!

the air is full,

full of love,

cuppid is busy,

doing his stuff,

making people be romantic,

making people do kind things,

making people love each other,

making people perfect cupples,

and making me the happyest person ever!

Light snow on the ground,

snow men all over town,

kids singing of joyfull stuff,

rain deer pawprints on my roof,

and presents under the tree,

Christmass was always the best!

HALLOWEEN

scary creaturs rome the earth

door bells ring, nocks on doors

rappers on the mid. night floor

orange, black, purple, and white

every were you look

jack-o'-lanterns go out

Halloween is over now i have 5 other halloween 1s but this was mi first poem out of ALL of them!

 

[Tamagirl_Desy]

Ummm...you need work.

It's good, but your trying to hard to think of good words. ^_^ Your poem doesn't exactly flow, but its good for a beginner.

Keep it up!

 

[lilmissgotchi]

ya.... but it is good for a beginner!!!!!!!!! ^_^

 

[tamachick1200]

Ummm...you need work.It's good, but your trying to hard to think of good words. Your poem doesn't exactly flow, but its good for a beginner.

Keep it up!

well I think you did an awesome job

 

[lilmissgotchi]

THANKS!!!!!!!!!! =]

 

[~TamaBloom12~]

I think the cristmas and halloween ones are nice, well done.

 

[Tamagirl_Desy]

well I think you did an awesome job

You may very well think she did do an awsome job, but...

I have this feeling you're making me look like the big bad wolf because of another topic.

We have our differences, but you must get over it.

Back to topic...

 

[*LoVeLy.SwAn.23*]

They are good, aren't you thinking of making a career out of this?

For people your age, they must be paid a hefty lot of dough for this

Go see if you qualify, I mean, there are a little mistakes here and there but I'm sure you could make it <_<

Great job lilmissgotchi, I never knew you were interested in writing such poems!

 

[tamachick1200]

You may very well think she did do an awsome job, but...I have this feeling you're making me look like the big bad wolf because of another topic.

We have our differences, but you must get over it.

Back to topic...

I'm sorry i get mean at times.

 

[lilmissgotchi]

thanks ppl! and *LoVeLy.SwAn.23* u made me laugh, but hey it a good idea!!

 

[*LoVeLy.SwAn.23*]

Its true though!