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[tamaheaven2]

THis is a corny poem I wrote.

I didn't copy this from anywhere - I made it up myself.

It's © 2007 - just in case.

The Magic Master

I know a girl who comes and goes

She is called the Magic Master

Sews fingers, banishes woes

Makes magic in her cooking pot

She bathes in the moonlight

Sings strange songs, undoes bad wrongs

Caresses fears, collects my tears

Makes magic in her cooking pot

She stews seaweed and starshine together

Rolls a magic dice, talks to the mice

Blows death kisses, listens to wishes

Makes magic in her cooking pot

She combs the clouds with silver fingers

Traps dust, strokes rust.

Summons hail, Children's wails

Makes magic in her cooking pot....

What do you think of it?

 

[tamaheaven2]

C'mon, I really need comments! I'm trying it for a competition and I wanted to see what people in general thought of it.

 

[tamafan2]

That was good! This should be in (Noon) TamaTalk, though.

 

[haze]

*Topic moved to '(Non)TamaTalk'*

 

[tamaheaven2]

hehe....I freaked out when I was checking back fr answers in What's on your Mind and I couldn't find it...

Thanks!

 

[Christina Lee]

THis is a corny poem I wrote.
I didn't copy this from anywhere - I made it up myself.

It's © 2007 - just in case.

The Magic Master

I know a girl who comes and goes

She is called the Magic Master

Sews fingers, banishes woes

Makes magic in her cooking pot

She bathes in the moonlight

Sings strange songs, undoes bad wrongs

Caresses fears, collects my tears

Makes magic in her cooking pot

She stews seaweed and starshine together

Rolls a magic dice, talks to the mice

Blows death kisses, listens to wishes

Makes magic in her cooking pot

She combs the clouds with silver fingers

Traps dust, strokes rust.

Summons hail, Children's wails

Makes magic in her cooking pot....

What do you think of it?

I love it though I think it should have a different ending and not something that you've repeated like 3 times. it should end with one last different line.

 

[eastbysoccergirl]

I loved it! I write poems myself, and i have to say that was great!

 

[vballbabe45]

That was fantastic!

 

[ta9394]

wonderful! love it! shocking! I see talent! Natural! Super! Awesome! touching! emotional!

'nuff said

 

[tamaheaven2]

wonderful! love it! shocking! I see talent! Natural! Super! Awesome! touching! emotional!
'nuff said

XD

Thanks!

 

[jimmythej]

I love it though I think it should have a different ending and not something that you've repeated like 3 times. it should end with one last different line.

personally I like the repitition, it makes it somewhat... constant, like in a song I can imagine it being softly sung and played on the guitar-not a load guitar, a gentle guitar. (the more I think about it the weirder the word 'guitar' becomes...)

I Like the poem. It would be a wonderful song too!