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Too much text, for sure. It's fine, but I'm not going to comment on the mary-suety of the characters...

Okay, you really need to improve your writing skills. To be honest, this couldn't be a chapter. It's a PARAGRAPH. If you're writing a story, it shouldn't look like this: It should be like this: For one, USE NEW LINES. Seriously, you really need to know to start a new line when a character is...

OOC: Timeskip again? xD Aaron, now dressed (thank god), pointed at Uriah and laughed. Mel tackled Joe out of the blue.

When the door was closed, Aaron began laughing. "Oh gosh, their faces...! That was hilarious!" "Smile, would you?" She leaned out and stretched the corners of his lips. "It looks a lot better on you."

"You say so?" Mel raised an eyebrow. "Oh yes... maybe I say it is relevant." The FBI stared. A naked guy petting his cat. They backed out slowly. xDDDD

"Well..." Said Mel. "How do you know it isn't relevant?" Aaron picked up Miruku. "Aww!" So he petted her. XD When the FBI came in, he said: "I... uh.... this is Mrs. Fuzzykinz the III."

"Turn into a kitty?" Asked Aaron curiously. "I better not turn into my freaky hybrid form, or else the FBI will be alll over me. I'd be like, a wat bor a balf." (XD) Mel stuck her tongue out at Joe, crossing her arms stubbornly.

Mel squeaked and jumped. "Not funny." She said, pouting and crossing his arms.

"Yeah, but they probably heard us or something." Said Aaron, watching the Police pull up. Mel looked at Joe and spazzed out randomly.

So Aaron did so. "Oh wait... don't hotel rooms have CAMERAS?" He asked. "Perhaps." Mel said to Joe, turning to look down at the grass.

OOC: YESPLZ. Aaron heard the police outside. He woke up, all D8 Mel smiled at Joe, feeling her cheeks burn red.

"I guess so." Said Mel. I'm so glad that he forgot about the incident that I called him handsome. Thought Mel. "Sorry, Miru. D8" Aaron like, walked to a generic hotel thing.

"Well, let's go." Said Aaron, laughing he picked up the condom box (XD Sorry, I had to say that for the cheap joke quality) and stuffed it in his pocket. Mel blinked. "What a messed up world." She muttered.

"Uh... then... you're my best friend's little sister?" Asked Aaron, shrugging. Mel shrugged. "Sounds funny."

"There isn't?" Mel blinked and close the phone. "But I thought pedophilery was wrong." "Sorry, Miru-chan." Said Aaron. "You, uh-- have to pose as my daughter. Um... adopted daughter." He laughed nervously.

"MIRU-CHAN, LET'S GO TO THE HOTEL AND -BEEEEEEEEP-." Said Aaron. x_x Mel stared, then started dialing the police.

OOC: I'LL WRITE FOR YOU THEN. =D

OOC: LYCHI'S B-DAY? HAPPY B-DAY! =D I'll uh... write you something! I can't draw, my Photoshop died. What pairing? :D

OOC: This RP is like... one huge, epic Soap Opera with some action. xD

OOC: You know, you could have joined any time. o_0